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Jaaz
09-30-2008, 12:05 PM
Hey there !

It's my first post here, I'd really need some advices on this picture.
I tried to make a good composition but something doesn't work and for the moment I don't know what.
Feel free to critic as you wish, it'll help me.

Thanks by advance !

http://img388.imageshack.us/img388/4136/lagoon2lt7.jpg
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Rasoul
09-30-2008, 05:10 PM
Very good start and a working palette...
As for the composition, it might be better to bring viewer to the focal point of your work.
For example the big foreground tree might be better to be straight or lean left, rather than leaning outward. And the rope bridge might be better to come inside the small island which seems to be a better focal point.

And here is a similar image reference
http://www.crabbdigital.com/NEW_COMM/Large_Images/Mattes/TreeHouse_001.jpg

rickei
10-01-2008, 07:36 AM
I agree with Rasoul.
the tree on the right, should probably lean into the comp. I would also get rid of the light area to the right of that tree... it keeps pulling my eye over to nothing.

I would get rid of the waterfall in the foreground... here again, it just pulls you eye down to the bottom of the comp, away from the focal point. plus this looks like a swamp, which is generally very flat land.

other that that it is a good concept. just be careful when you start adding texture details, it can make the difference between small people, living in normal sized trees... or normal sized people living in giant trees.

homer
10-01-2008, 06:51 PM
Agree with both.
Hope to see this finished.
It looks interesting.

Jaaz
10-03-2008, 05:16 AM
Hey guys,

Thanks for the good critics and sorry for the late answer!
I fixed the issues you told me, but I still have a problem with it.
And again, by working on it a long time I don't see anything anymore.
Here is the update.

http://img375.imageshack.us/img375/5085/laggoonnbf2.jpg
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rickei
10-03-2008, 07:43 PM
This looks good to me.

my only suggestion at this point is maybe go a little darker so that the lights from the houses, show up better.

looking forward to seeing some details.

RALawrence
10-05-2008, 06:04 PM
Looking better. But it seems to me that the water, being bright and taking up most of the center, is the focal point, when I would imagine you want the architecture to be what draws the viewers' eyes. You should consider what you can do to make the water lay back and the structures pop.

Jaaz
10-07-2008, 04:30 AM
Hey !

Thanks for the comments, it's really appreciated.
I'll go darker as you said Rickei and I guess that you're true RAlawrence, i'm working on it now, trying to find te good balance between structures and the water.

Tnaks again, i'll post some updates.