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Marzi
08-16-2008, 10:04 AM
My first message hier :) i ve start to matte paint there is only few month and i love it. tell me what you think about my last creation. i ll be greatful. It's for a Photoshop contest. actually my second matte..
Sorry about my poor english.. i'll learn..

http://www.marzi.ch/images/larochelle16982.jpg

from :

http://www.marzi.ch/images/larochelle.jpg

Madster
08-18-2008, 01:38 PM
This is pretty good!

Only a couple of "glaring errors."
1. The explosion happening at the back of the turret in the background. The pirate ship is in front, and is firing on the ship in the foreground. That explosion looks odd.
2. The black shape in front of the moon and clouds. It just doesn't read well. If it's a sail or smoke, make it more translucent. If it's anything else, get rid of it, and just have moon and clouds. Whatever is in that LH corner needs better illumination.

The lighting is fairly consistent and even, the water looks great, and there is pretty good visual flow to direct the eye around the piece.

Good luck with the competition!

~M

Marzi
08-19-2008, 04:35 AM
Thank's for your advice! It will help me a lot. I have to give back this picture wednesday so i will told you my position in the competition soon :)

Greatfully

Marzi

Marzi
08-19-2008, 07:07 AM
A little update.

http://www.marzi.ch/images/larochelle16992.jpg

full rez:
http://www.marzi.ch/images/larochelle1699.jpg

chrike
08-19-2008, 10:05 AM
I think it's really nicely done! However, the rapid light falloff and the fact that every shadow seems to share the same value makes it appear rather flat. Some more atmospherics and variations of the darks would help increasing the feeling for depth and scale.

Madster
08-19-2008, 10:10 AM
It's just too dark, and the moon dominates everything except the explosions.

Why not put the clouds behind the right side, and USE that refraction of the moonlight to better illuminate this scene?

That left hand side will "sink" this entry. It's so dark and indistinct that it could be high voltage wires, for all the viewer knows. Perhaps a small lantern hanging or something to provide some subtle lighting there.

It now looks like you have a party going on the top deck of the centermost ship. This could be due to the bad cloud placement. The values are just very, very hard to appreciate. Too many extremes, with not enough subtle transitions for the eye.

Best of luck to you!

~M

Marzi
08-21-2008, 01:58 AM
Tanks a lot for your comments.

i was just realy short in the time so tere is my participation. Maybe i 'll continue to work on this picture.

http://www.marzi.ch/images/larochelleFINAL2.jpg

FULL REZ (http://www.marzi.ch/images/larochelleFINAL.jpg)

http://www.marzi.ch/images/base.jpg

Maybe can you give me some advice to create atmospherique smog on this sort of picture... ?