Critics on "Office Requiem", by Saftan

[Saftan]

This was the original photo that I found during a "google-moment".
I have reduced the size to keep the weight down. The uncompressed version is at 1024*768 px.
The average time on this one was about three days.
Platform: Photoshop


http://www.bonetweb.com/ragno/art/Officebuilding_small.jpg


..and here's the final one!


http://www.bonetweb.com/ragno/art/Officebuilding_matte_small.jpg


If you feel like giving me your thought on it, please do!


/Staffan Ragno

[batera33]

Hi Saftan!!!

Your work is good, I liked the car!!! Nice crash!

But I think you could add some trash in the ground to make it more real...
In the larger area of the building that clearest broken window should be darker!!!I don't know if there is a roof there or not!

I think it needs more black dirt. I supposed that an explosion caused this mess isn't it? The helicopter should be a little brigther, and the street could be more reflexive (like the man's reflexion), with some brigth spots.

Yeah, there is some little things to do but it can get better!
Take a look in some pictures to have more references, ok !

Batera33

[AJ]

Is this building damaged in an explosion or something else? It looks like an earthquake proof building, with all that extra support structure around it?

I like the mood in your image, the grey, rainy day suits the sombre tone. I do think there could be a few more broken windows though, especially at the front right-hand side? It looks like there are completely smashed windows right next to untouched ones?

I agree with batera about the debris in the street, it does look as though there would be more rubble there (unless this damage is old and partially cleared away?)

[stevenbray1]

Very nice! Yes I with most of what's been posted. Add some soot from fires that would've burned inside the building after an explosion and darken the damaged areas, they are a bit bright.

Also check the edges on the trees against the sky.

But, very good, I love the damaged cars on the street below and it DOES look wet, like it's raining.

[Luxo_Jr]

I agree with what everyone else has said really, I dig it too, and the other suggestion I would have is that the damaged areas at the top of your building look a bit too sharp. Maybe feather them a bit so they blend in a bit more to the building maybe. Keep experimenting!